I wasn’t sure!  Since this was being planned for someone else to ink, I was thinking it might get someone else scripting as well.  I am very glad to know you will do it!

I think that would be ideal!  There is a depth to the pencils that I have been enjoying the hell out of with the sneak peeks, and it would be amazing to see the whole story this way

"And my dream scenario is still seeing it as an oversized Artists Edition shot from the pencils."

Mr. Ryall, when can I reserve my copy?

The second panel's narrative caused my brain to leap in an incorrect way. I think this is because the 'the cry' refers back to the previous panel, but my eyes seeing it level with a speech balloon in the same panel made some kind of connection and then suddenly was confused as where the 'is heard' fits. Logically, the way you have laid it out all makes sense, but intuitively my brain got in a muddle.

I think if the 'across a devastated landscape' narrative block was joined with the next one it would solve this. Minor point and I know that what you are showing is not final, so feel free to ignore!

Struck again by how epic that planet in the first panel is. I can almost see the atmospheric layer.

VERY happy to hear this.  This falls into the category of one of those things none of us ever thought would happen, and if it does happen, and happen in an oversized AE shot from pencils, all I can say is wow - a dream come true.